Collage Speech: Meat Heads

Training Powerlifting
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Hey fellas, I am writing a speech for my collage communication class. Thought you guys might want to see the into to the outline i gave to my professor.

       Informative Speech
  My Informative Speech is going to be something I love and cherish, something I take pride in and represent, and something I vow to continue to practice, participate, and experience over and over till I grow old. The brotherhood of Iron is a way of life. The purpose is to inform, and create an experience at the gym.

There arenâ??t many people that possess a lot of experience on how real muscle is obtained, and how to maintain, eat, and grow more is possible. If I am able to catch anyoneâ??s interest in how this is done, I will hope that by the end of my speech they are able to take steps in this direction such as I did, and share the experience with me.

  I want to speak about the brotherhood of iron, weightlifting, pain tolerance, dedication, and technical understanding, because these are the questions that are presented to myself and my colleagues often, and if not every day. When we show our presence in the local fitness clubs in which you may enjoy your Sunday treadmill journey, we are not often welcomed.

Many people think of us as gym rats, gorillas and carnivores, or even â??Neanderthals,â?? and that we belong in the dungeons in which we perform our archaic activities. This is insulting, because the truth about these large meat eating individuals you see, shaking the earth and striding slow is much farther from what you may think.

These people are very smart, and passionate. What they do and live, commands respect and I will assume it my job to hopefully correct this image.

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It’s COLLEGE, not COLLAGE.

Is English your first language? I’m really hoping it’s not, because this is barely intelligible. I’m not trying to hurt your feelings or anything, but this is really bad, and there’s no reason to sugar-coat things if you’re looking for an honest opinion.

I understand the content you’re trying to convey, and I appreciate your passion for lifting, as I’m sure most people on this site do. There are a few things in here you can work with, but overall, your sentence structure is so poor that the message is lost.

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so fix the sentence structure, and we got a deal? lol the good news is i have to speak… and im graded heavily on the oral portion

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Before you posted you should probably at least have read through it. Does it sound right? Does it clearly convey the point you’re trying to make? Or does it sound like you’re all over the place when you read it?

First thing you should decide is whether you’re a strong public speaker and could speak articulately while staying on point with an outline in front of you, or if you’d be better off just writing your speech verbatim and doing your best to memorize it so you don’t have to keep looking down at the paper and away from your audience.

The first is preferable for those who speak very well, but the vast majority most of us are better off dictating a pre-written speech (even Obama does this, and politics aside he delivers excellent speeches).

Organize your speech first, and what you want to convey. That way when you write it out it has a flow to it, instead of being choppy, jumping around from point to point and often repeating the same thing as the above currently does. The main gist seems to be:

Intro:

-You’re going to talk about lifting weights.
-Most people have misconceptions about weightlifters
-Give a good example or two here, the neanderthal thoughts, etc.
-The truth is lifting is complex, very rewarding etc.

Body:

-Give your audience a brief intro on “lifting.” They are all clueless remember, so start simple.
-A lot of people go to the gym and lift weights to be healthy, stay in shape, look good etc. But there’s actually a whole world of competitive sport.
-Multiple “sports” that relate to lifting weights: Bodybuilding, powerlifting, olympic lifting. Explain the differences clearly and succinctly.
-Explain that you’re going to focus on PLing, and why (want to be strong, comradery of meets, whatever the hell the reason is).

Powerlifting, go into detail:

-Powerlifters want to get as strong as they can in three lifts. Basically explain those lifts.
-Mention some feats to grab the audience’s interest. Magnusson deadlifting 1015, Ed Coan DL’ing 900 @220, Spoto recently breaking the raw bench record.
-Explain briefly how they train. Various competing ideas etc. But this will bore the shit out of audience so keep it short.
-Hit the meet of your speech, which I assume is how much commitment it requires, how the competitiveness and comradarie exist together and fuel people etc.

-Conclude/wrap it up. Hope they gained some knowledge about competitive weightlifting, why you will pursue powerlifting the rest of your life etc.

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im gonna read what you said 5 or so times, and get back to you on how it works for me when i update everything:) thank you so much!

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[quote]Rock978 wrote:
Before you posted you should probably at least have read through it. Does it sound right? Does it clearly convey the point you’re trying to make? Or does it sound like you’re all over the place when you read it?

First thing you should decide is whether you’re a strong public speaker and could speak articulately while staying on point with an outline in front of you, or if you’d be better off just writing your speech verbatim and doing your best to memorize it so you don’t have to keep looking down at the paper and away from your audience.

The first is preferable for those who speak very well, but the vast majority most of us are better off dictating a pre-written speech (even Obama does this, and politics aside he delivers excellent speeches).

Organize your speech first, and what you want to convey. That way when you write it out it has a flow to it, instead of being choppy, jumping around from point to point and often repeating the same thing as the above currently does. The main gist seems to be:

Intro:

-You’re going to talk about lifting weights.
-Most people have misconceptions about weightlifters
-Give a good example or two here, the neanderthal thoughts, etc.
-The truth is lifting is complex, very rewarding etc.

Body:

-Give your audience a brief intro on “lifting.” They are all clueless remember, so start simple.
-A lot of people go to the gym and lift weights to be healthy, stay in shape, look good etc. But there’s actually a whole world of competitive sport.
-Multiple “sports” that relate to lifting weights: Bodybuilding, powerlifting, olympic lifting. Explain the differences clearly and succinctly.
-Explain that you’re going to focus on PLing, and why (want to be strong, comradery of meets, whatever the hell the reason is).

Powerlifting, go into detail:

-Powerlifters want to get as strong as they can in three lifts. Basically explain those lifts.
-Mention some feats to grab the audience’s interest. Magnusson deadlifting 1015, Ed Coan DL’ing 900 @220, Spoto recently breaking the raw bench record.
-Explain briefly how they train. Various competing ideas etc. But this will bore the shit out of audience so keep it short.
-Hit the meet of your speech, which I assume is how much commitment it requires, how the competitiveness and comradarie exist together and fuel people etc.

-Conclude/wrap it up. Hope they gained some knowledge about competitive weightlifting, why you will pursue powerlifting the rest of your life etc.

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Really nice help you provided there. Well done. Great to see the support that this community can provide one another.

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Not much of a suggestion, but you could title it “Meet Heads” if you’re serious about powerlifting. Obvious, but still good play on words.

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How long is the speech requirements? If its informative you are usually looking at a pretty short one, 3-5 minutes is my guess, might be as much as 10. With that kind of time I’d recommend really narrowing your topic to something relatable to people that have never touched a weight.

I actually did one of my speeches in my first college class basically on why everyone in the world should lift weights (I very much believe this). If you want to talk about powerlifting specifically or bodybuilding specifically that’d work too.

I feel like your current topic is really broad for a short speech, and you just aren’t gonna have time to make any sense to your audience or your instructor. I could be wrong, but that’s my suggestion.

Rock978’s post is perfect if you plan to go ahead with that topic

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Ok so… it is about 3-5 minutes. I really wanted to give the class a chance to kind of put themselves in my shoes for a few minutes. Make them see what i think approaching a grueling 50 rep drop set, the things i think about before hand. And even before that, what ive been thinking about to prepare myself all day… make them understand that its to the extreme and that sometimes requires a “spiritual” connection with something deep down to surpass the pain. Do you think this is too in depth? I love the ideas written down so far

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meet heads sounds perfect!

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“Meet Heads” - I don’t recommend this.

  1. It’s a speech - spelling puns don’t carry well in that format. The only person who will see this is possibly your professor, and she/he will just think you don’t know how to spell.

  2. It will be completely lost on your audience even if it’s conveyed properly. The average person (i.e. the entire constiuency of your audience) doesn’t even know what powerlifting is, much less what a “meet” means in this context.

I do recommend you use humor liberally. Rule #1 of any speech - know your audience. Put yourself in their shoes - they think of big, bulky, weight-lifting men and think “intense, scary, obsessive, intimidating.” Honing in about the deep, dark pain, spirtuality and intensity of lifting weights is not what will ingratiate them to you. You will just reaffirm their belief that you are not someone to shoot the shit with about last week’s How I Met Your Mother because you are scaaarrrrry.

I’ll give you an example: I’m an attorney, and during law school, I took a course in intellectual property. All students had to give a presentation on an object of their choosing and pretend like they had to analyze it for a patent application. One portly fellow decided to analyze his high-tech switch blade (which he apparently carried around on campus, much to my concern, but I digress).

Now, this dude probably thought, “Hey. People with knives aren’t so bad. Knives, when handled properly, are great utility devices and self-defense tools and I can show people how great they are!” Instead, it was really akward, and everyone thought he was a psycho for choosing a knife. Why? Cause he didn’t smile or joke once or break the ice in any way. He just talked about his fucking knife, and people were understandably quite disturbed.

I agree you should explain that it takes more brains and heart to lift serious weights than most people realize. We are people just like everyone else who can be very passionate about their lifestyles/hobbies/whatever you want to call it, and we don’t deserve the reputation of being stupid. But what makes a great speech is more than just clearly expressing yourself - it’s capturing the hearts and minds of your audience.

I also highly recommend you have a friend/T-Nation review and proof your final draft.

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awsome, sounds like a plan. I will make sure to post the final product for your review.